The first three minutes are the product: pick 3 jokes, hit the stage, see the room react, fix the weak line, test it again, and feel yourself get funnier.
Original BOMBED sample. Five dimensions. One 100-point verdict. Mickey roasts the weak spot, Augie tells you how to fix it, then the joke gets a stronger direction.
Rough premise · 42/100 · Survived
Autopsy vs autopay
I confused autopay and autopsy on a clinic bill and thought, “I’m alive, why are they billing me for my autopsy?”
Mickey: You found a funny word mix-up and then explained it like you were apologizing to a receptionist.
Augie: The villain is billing. Make the paperwork colder than the diagnosis, then end on the hardest word.
Rewrite direction · 86/100 · Killed
Make billing the villain
Clinic billing does not ask if you are alive. It asks if alive is in-network.
That is American healthcare: you find out you died because the invoice got there first.The ghost is covered, but only after a referral from his primary haunting physician.I called billing and they said, “Good news, the autopsy is covered. Bad news, the copay survived.”